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On Parabola by =tearstone:icontearstone:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Philosophical > Fixed




With subatomic subtlety settling on his brow,
he said 'Time's a broken arrow
that points from then to now.'
Once a grain, I entreated him
to stop this flow of sand,
'You're immersed in the irreversible
until, entropical, I land.'

In that glass all is hours,
the busted bucket and the spade,
and each collapsing castle
that our spilt ice cream made.

Since his hands are tide
we can all be shore,
when the sediment slides
there is no more.
©2005-2008 =tearstone
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I wrote this whilst reading about collapsing wave functions.
I hope, dear reader, that all is well at your point on the curve.
Daily Deviation, 2005-11-18

Daily DeviationDear reader,

I hope that all is well at your point on the curve.

=tearstone (Featured by `imperfect)

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`imperfect:iconimperfect: Nov 5, 2005, 5:06:39 AM
It's such a treat to find poetry from you.

"In that glass all is hours," - fantastic :)

I want to say more but i shall not. Move it out of scraps though?

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are you stalking me?
~sumants:iconsumants: Nov 6, 2005, 12:41:09 AM
a grain - Yes, I got it. No, it's not punctuated right in the vicinity.

And yet the hourglass is a revolved hyperbola in its most functional form.

You also happen to have a combination of three different rhymes. And an abundance of homophony. Cleverly done, my friend.
=tearstone:icontearstone: Nov 6, 2005, 1:20:48 AM
Since you liked it (and that's my first ever fav from you!) I shall move it out of scraps.
Thanks, missy =)

You ok?

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~Coffeehouse had your mum last night
=tearstone:icontearstone: Nov 6, 2005, 1:22:23 AM
My most profound appreciation for your continued support, mon ami.
A comma after grain perhaps?

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~Coffeehouse had your mum last night
=kaujot:iconkaujot: Nov 6, 2005, 2:56:37 PM
The last stanza strikes me as rhythmically different than the first (the second being in between, how convenient). It still reads well, and I enjoy the extremely clever word-play, but those gosh darn rhythms are just a bit wonky.

Good to see you around, sir.

Let's talk sometime.

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abcdefghijklmnopqrstuvwxyz

I saw, darling, but do lie.
`Bringa:iconBringa: Nov 6, 2005, 3:06:39 PM
The interesting question is: why does a lawyer turned literati-vigilante write about wave functions?

And yes, it is very much like your sense of humir. Which means good ;)

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SINAI BENDS
~sumants:iconsumants: Nov 7, 2005, 7:32:53 AM
That might work, because it reinforces the idea that a grain could also stand for again.
~drinkyourtea:icondrinkyourtea: Nov 12, 2005, 8:39:06 PM
well I'm a fellow writer and I enjoyed that quite thoroughly if that is how it's spelt
=tearstone:icontearstone: Nov 15, 2005, 1:11:16 AM
thanks, it is =)

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~Coffeehouse had your mum last night
~drinkyourtea:icondrinkyourtea: Nov 15, 2005, 5:09:07 AM
your welcome my furry coconuted friend lol it's a long story the coconut thing :giggle:
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